Asonjay Draven, The Watcher

Discussion in 'Character Information' started by Asonsanidiot, Apr 12, 2018.

  1. Asonsanidiot

    Asonsanidiot New Arrival

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    General Information

    Asonjay, or Ason as he prefers to be called, is a strange novakid that travels the cosmos. He keeps most of his things on him, worried that one day his ship will be stolen with any supplies inside. Ason also has a love for music, owning two instruments and hoping to find more.


    Physical Appearance

    Ason is a 6' novakid with slightly translucent grey gas with a dark Omege brand. As he doesn't care much for his appearance, he wears a long sleeved shirt with a vest and gloves, along with dark grey pants, all under a brown colored coat going down to the top of his feet with an exposed cooling unit on his back. He has gravitic compression boots and energy dash tech.



    Personality

    Personality Type: Kind, Tolerant, Patient, Strange.

    Political Ideology: Make allies, never enemies. You'll need help eventually.

    Ason usually speaks like a human, sometimes slipping up and speaking like a mostly normal novakid. If not approached, he will likely stay back and watch events unfold. If approached, Ason will greet the person normally, introducing himself if needed. He has no specific goal, but the idea of finding a safe planet to build a home on seems interests him the most. Ason has an irrational fear of fragmentation grenades, florans, and no good reason hates pumpkin pie.


    Backstory

    Ason's life is similar to most other novakids until he visited Terra by hiding in the cargo hold of a transport ship. When he first stepped out into the light of day and looked up to the tall buildings around him, he immediately wanted to make himself a home somewhere on the planet. He did so, finding a space inside an abandoned warehouse. After staying there and exploring the city, he hitched a ride onto a forest planet. While there, he ran into a wild floran. After a small shoot out, Ason tried to throw a fragmentation grenade at the floran when they suddenly tackled him, causing the grenade to explode a few feet away where the fragments killed the floran and severely hurt Ason. He managed to survive long enough to find help. After that incident, he wandered the cosmos, picking up materials as he visited planets and eventually got new weapons.
     
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  2. Capslock

    Capslock you're all nerds Ex-Staff Event Builder

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    Hi, I'm noticing a few issues with this that I'd like to point out and help you fix.

    With this section, there's a number of problems.
    First, a novakid's brand is also their brain. If the brand is damaged, that's equivalent to damaging a human's brain, which would obviously cause quite a number of issues.
    Second is the description of your character's outfit, described as "the Gambler's set". While it's perfectly fine to use just about any in-game item to represent your character's appearance, we don't use the item's stats or in-game description for what it is ICly, so it would just be regular clothing instead of an end-game suit of armor.
    Lastly is the equipped techs. Again, the in-game techs are not always IC, however people are allowed to make technology applications in the correct forum, found here. ( https://galactic-citizen.com/forums/tech-augment-applications.69/ )
    There's already applications for the dash tech and the jump tech, so i'll give you links to those too.
    https://galactic-citizen.com/threads/double-jump-boots.470/
    https://galactic-citizen.com/threads/energy-dash.576/#post-795
    If you want to use those techs ICly I recommend that you read those two apps. As for the aqua sphere tech, you're out of luck on that one.

    The other section I wanted to point out was this;
    The biggest issue here is that the Protectorate never existed before Earthfall in GC's lore, which happened 43 years ago ICly. You're going to want to change that, and read the Human lore so you can know what really happened.
    https://galactic-citizen.com/threads/00-the-human-lore-summary.787/
     
  3. Asonsanidiot

    Asonsanidiot New Arrival

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    Oh, thanks for telling me. I'm still new to this. I'll change it right away.