The Faulkyyr

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  1. evanthebruce

    evanthebruce New Arrival

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    The Pitch

    Massive, fur-coated hunters with a below average tech level.

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    The Snapshot

    History:


    The Faulkyyr originate from a world abundant in dense forests and sparse grasslands, though in warmer climates, such as the equator of the planet, these become jungles and savannas. The planet has four large continents, all of which hold a large mountain range, and many small islands dotted about the ocean.


    When the Faulkyyr first came to dominance in the ecosystem, they quickly became top of the food chain as they were much larger than most of the other creatures on the planet. They quickly learned basic hunting techniques. They could be found mostly in the dense forests of the planet, avoiding the open plains because it was harder for them to sneak up on prey, since they were so large. Because they were top of the food chain, they didn’t need to adapt as much, and because of this, they evolved rather slowly compared to the other races in the Milky Way.


    Over the course of millions of years, the Faulkyyr developed society and culture. However, this culture was based upon war. All inventions that the Faulkyyr created aided them in combat or hunting such as new weapons, new armor, and new defensive structures and buildings. There were four main factions within the Faulkyyr, one on each continent, and they were constantly at war. If a Faulkyyrian wasn’t fighting, they were hunting, and if not hunting, they were at home enjoying the fruits of their labor. However, they were not advanced enough to develop space travel on their own. They first discovered space travel when a small, furry explorer landed on their planet, and they commandeered their vessel.


    Biology:


    Faulkyyr are quite large mammalian creatures. Males are around 12 to 14 feet tall, and females are around 10 to 12 feet tall. Faulkyrr weigh about 3000 pounds on average if not wearing body armor. The Faulkyrr are carnivores, and must eat a large amount of food everyday. To assist with this, they have three fingers on each hand, each adorned with a large claw. Because of this, and their immense size, it is difficult for them to use tools or weapons designed for other races. In addition, male Faulkyyr have two sets of tusks that they use for fighting and for mating purposes. Due to their size and weight, they move rather slowly, but competently, on two feet. However, they are able to run quadrupedally as well if they wish to cover large distances. In addition, they are quite strong, and able to carry much more than their body weight. Because of the lack of opposable thumbs, they evolved to have a second set of smaller arms lower on their bodies. Like the arms of a tyrannosaurus rex, they are quite small, and close to the body. The Faulkyyr can use the opposable thumbs found on this second set of hands for craftsmanship, however if they wish to run or do anything that requires immense strength, they still have to use their larger, main forearms.


    Culture:


    The Faulkyyrian culture is one based on deceit and horrible injustices. Too the uninformed, the Faulkyyr are a race of dumb, slow, aggressive, warmongering fighters. And while all of these are true, it isn’t what they were originally like. At some point in the Faulkyyr’s history, a group started a revolution and seized power. Once they gained power they quickly went to work erasing any trace of their old culture. They erected large pyramid cities to live in while forcing the rest to live in abject poverty. They brainwashed all those they could, and killed those they couldn’t. Those in the upper class retained their intelligence and technology, which was similar to that of fifteenth-century-Earth level with simple firearms. The rest reverted to much more primal creatures, with a tech level that consisted of simple metalworking. Those in power were rarely seen after these changes were put in place, except for those in charge of the selective breeding. These upper-class Faulkyyr were the only ones that would initiate any mating between two Faulkyyr. In doing this they could breed the perfect slaves. They then sent these children to school where they were brainwashed and taught to kill.

    Those in power pretended to split off into four separate tribes. In doing this they could create a fictional war to keep those in the lower class busy. It also allowed them to instill a sense of absolutely loyalty from the lower class to themselves. In reality, all four tribes work together to keep up the perpetual war. Faulkyyr are allowed to leave the planet, but only after they have been brainwashed. They go out to other worlds to take jobs that will pay them in better armor and weapons so that they can return back to their planet and fight in the war. If they die, the upper class can take their advanced tech. If they survive, the upper class can further increase tribe spirit by parading these Faulkyyr as war heroes. However, there have been a few Faulkyyr that were snuck off the planet by one of the more advanced races that lives on a nearby planet. These Faulkkyr have been observed to be quite clever and not nearly as beastlike as those that are brainwashed. This has only happened to a handful of Faulkyyr at most. This is due to the fact that whenever any other race visits the planet, they are confined to the palaces of the upper tribe and told the rest of the planet is too dangerous for them to see.

    Pictures:

    Faulkyyr Skull
    https://gyazo.com/798d53cab2f92b390ee909935a6eda4f

    Faulkyyr City
    https://gyazo.com/686315187e5b44a894fa2494e3de2635

    How they Would Look In game (Thanks to TrIpTiCuS for the animation and pixel art, and head design by Dekerrex):
    https://gyazo.com/4a060d8824da71a18204252e468dd94c
    https://gyazo.com/e2e38651cb0e6923a91aabd2c5c7d1d2
    https://gyazo.com/88a5ca1ffa584903aa5893374152a8d4

    Cosigners:
    TrIpTiCuS
    ZachChase
    Randy
     
    Last edited: Apr 19, 2018
  2. TrIpTiCuS

    TrIpTiCuS Galactic Enforcer

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    Confirming my cosign!
     
  3. Randy

    Randy Galactic Commoner

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    You got my co-sign, mate!
     
  4. ZachChase

    ZachChase Does Anyone Read These? Gold Donator

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    Co-sign my dude.
     
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  5. Pinkbat5

    Pinkbat5 pocl v3.7.2 Staff Member Administrator Diamond Donator

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    Given a hard pending on the basis that the species is mostly indistinguishable from an Earth animal, with the addition of humanlike intelligence. They follow the format of Earth animal + Earth culture, without anything that hints at their extraterrestrial origins.
    There are a few good base ideas here, but the species needs something that makes them very clearly not from the Sol system.
    If you need ideas, feel free to PM me and we can brainstorm.
     
  6. Pinkbat5

    Pinkbat5 pocl v3.7.2 Staff Member Administrator Diamond Donator

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    Due to an edit to the biology, they now deviate enough from Earth life to get a pass. Onto stage two, my friends!
     
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  7. WowGain

    WowGain Bara King Staff Member Administrator Bronze Donator Event Builder

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    @evanthebruce Is this still a project which you are working on?
     
  8. evanthebruce

    evanthebruce New Arrival

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    Surprisingly, Yes
     
  9. WowGain

    WowGain Bara King Staff Member Administrator Bronze Donator Event Builder

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    Gotcha, whenever you've got your second stage ready to grade, just poke either me or pink in here with a mention.

    @evanthebruce
     
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  10. Dekerrex

    Dekerrex Watcher from The Void Ex-Staff Gold Donator

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    This application will be moved to denied due to writer inactivity.